Prak1[r1] _Sedlmajerová_Essay_Dec2023


                 Young people never want to dress the same as their parents[r2] .



A[r3]  sentence that holds a lot of weight, as it is both true, and a little interesting. Why do
young people not want to dress like their parents? Although, on one hand[r4] , some young people do
want to dress like their parents, while others do not. There are a lot of reasons why this is the
case in most teenagers and young adults.

For example, [r5] the old communist days and the unspoken rule of needing to be dressed a certain
way. Dressing differently was a way of fighting against the cruel, unfair system. Due to this small
type of rebellion, the consequences were simple and quick; forcing people to obey the dress code,
or else. Nevertheless[r6] , people fought on, and eventually got their freedom.

As a result, [r7] some people nowadays, even those who had lived through the system, dress
differently to both celebrate the freedom, and to also escape the past. Of[r8]  course, the past is
not the only reason for this very common behaviour in young adults.

In[r9]  conclusion, everybody has always said at least once that they do not want to be like their
parents due to bad experiences, or even worse; abuse. They want to escape that image of their
parents, and the worry of becoming like them.


This is an example essay written by a first-year student for Prak1. It would receive a maximum of
15, due to its composition, use of language, formal style and use of discussive points. Although it
is subjective it uses real world examples to good effect and does not read like a story, but
rather, as it should, it reads as an essay.
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 [r1]Correct format

 [r2]Correct title

 [r3]Opening paragraph setting out the essay

 [r4]Correct idiom to compare behaviour

 [r5]2^nd paragraph Giving  concrete examples objectively

 [r6]Discussive technique

 [r7]3^rd paragraph, rounding off the information

 [r8]Good opening to the sentence

 [r9]Concluding the essay, final paragraph